雅思写作中强烈不建议使用个人例子
原因一: 雅思真正官方资料(剑桥雅思)上官方满分范文从不使用个人例子。
原因二:因为个人例子没有说服力。原因三:雅思写作是普适性的推理。
原因四:很多同学会把个人例子写成故事或记流水帐,这是完全不可取的。
Bad example:
There are many reasons to argue that certain professions are underpaid. For example, my friend is a nurse and he has to work very long hours so I don’t get much time to see him, but when he does have some free time he can’t afford to do very much because of his low wages.
Good example:
There are many reasons to argue that certain professions are underpaid. For example, nurses are often required to work long hours leaving them little time for socialising, and even during their leisure time they are often limited by low wages.
Bad example:
A friend of mine has been unable to find work recently as he does not have the right qualifications.
Good example:
It is common for people to be unable to find work without the right qualifications.
误区二: 编造"权威"例子
雅思写作中的例子不是必须是真的,所以我们很多同学编造一些比如: 中国社科院研究表明...; 哈佛大学研究表明...这些自己都不会相信的例子,更是骗不过阅卷人。
Bad example:
The overuse of technology is also having a significant impact on our ability to socialise in a face-to-face environment. A recent Harvard study indicated that most people now spend less than half the amount of time talking directly to people compared with just 10 years ago, attributing this change to our focus on mobile devices in public places such as waiting for a bus or even walking along the street.
Good example:
The overuse of technology is also having a significant impact on our ability to socialise in a face-to-face environment. It is common to see that most people now spend much less time talking directly to people compared with just 10 years ago, attributing this change to our focus on mobile devices in public places such as waiting for a bus or even walking along the street.
现在问题来了?如果同学在话题上有专业背景,确实能记得一些权威机构的专业研究,那么能用在雅思文章中支持自己的观点吗?
答案是不建议,因为雅思写作不是专业性写作,写进去可能会适得其反。
误区三: 过于夸张
有些同学为了体现出问题的严重性,采用夸张的数据和例子,是不可取的。
Bad example:
Obesity has become an increasing problem over recent years, largely due to diet. To illustrate, 90% of children drink at least 10 sugary drinks a day, in addition to meals that are often artificially sweetened such as breakfast cereals which have 100 times more sugar than needed.
Good example:
Obesity has become an increasing problem over recent years, largely due to diet. To illustrate, a large number of children drink multiple sugary drinks a day, in addition to meals that are often artificially sweetened such as breakfast cereals containing excess sugar.
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